Always good to have a qualifying statement!
Well, Golden Week is over. I was really hoping to have that query letter whipped into shape and ready to go before my vacation was over, but that was naive.
Anyway, the qualifying statement is that the query in the first post is one of several iterations that I've been working on. If anyone is interested (that doesn't already know), you can follow the progress on Nathan Bransford's forum here. It still needs loads of work and everyone's feedback is helping a lot - I'm just not able to put it into effect somehow. I feel like I keep getting close, but then it eludes me again.
That's all for now. Back again tonight!